Let us start with the river - all things begin with the river and we shall probably end there, no doubt - but let's wait and see how we go.
So begins William Boyd's most recent novel, Ordinary Thunderstorms. It began with the river in more ways than one according to the author:
The idea for the novel started when I read that every year in London they take 60 bodies a year out of the Thames, usually at the bend in the river near Greenwich. That's more than one a week, but you never hear about them. And then I thought immediately about the opening scenes of Dickens's Our Mutual Friend and the body being pulled out of the river. And I figured out that there was a way of writing a novel in the way that Our Mutual Friend does, from the very top of society to the very bottom. It all began to come together.
I found the book curiously underpowered and often sloppily written, from the very first sentence: '...we shall probably end there, no doubt'. Well, what's it to be?
I went back to Our Mutual Friend, which contains passages like this one:
The squall had come up, like a spiteful messenger before the morning; there followed in its wake a ragged tear of light which ripped the dark clouds until they showed a great grey hole of day.
The were all shivering, and everything about them seemed to be shivering; the river itself, craft, rigging, sails, such early smoke as there yet was on the shore. Black with wet, and altered to the eye by white patches of hail and sleet, the huddled buildings looked lower than usual, as if they were cowering, and had shrunk with the cold. Very little life was to be seen on either bank, windows and doors were shut, and the staring black and white letters upon wharves and warehouses "looked." said Eugene to Mortimer, "like inscriptions over the graves of dead businesses."
This was Dickens' last completed novel and passages like the one above strike me as very modern. It appears to sit just a little upstream of another description, perhaps the most famous of the estuarial Thames, from Conrad's Heart of Darkness:
The sea-reach of the Thames stretched before us like the beginning of an interminable waterway. In the offing the sea and the sky were welded together without a joint, and in the luminous space the tanned sails of the barges drifting up with the tide seemed to stand still in red clusters of canvas sharply peaked, with gleams of varnished sprits. A haze rested on the low shores that ran out to sea in vanishing flatness. The air was dark above Gravesend, and farther back still seemed condensed into a mournful gloom, brooding motionless over the biggest, and the greatest, town on earth.
Perhaps it's unfair on Boyd to measure him against these two masters but there's really nothing in his book to compare - almost literally. It's a thriller so we shouldn't expect too many literary extravagances but nevertheless the language is so flat and indistinct it fails to draw us in. Here's the main description of the river from the first couple of pages:
Adam walked over to the high stone balustrade that curved the roadway into Chelsea Bridge and, leaning on it, looked down at the Thames. The tide was high and still coming in, he saw, the normal flow of water reversed, flotsam moving surprisingly quickly upstream, heading inland, as if the sea were dumping its rubbish in the river rather than the usual, other way round... [H]e didn't feel as if he were in the middle of a huge city at all: the trees, the quiet force of the surging, tidal river beneath his feet, that special luminescence that a body of water throws off, made him grow calmer - he'd been right to come to the river - odd how these instincts mysteriously drive you, he thought.
Not bad but hardly captivating. It's imprecise, it lacks particularity: 'high' (repeated), 'normal', 'surprisingly', 'usual', 'a body', 'special', 'mysteriously'. It tips its hat to the river's mystical influences but can't be bothered to do any more. You feel neither the reality of the river nor its resonances and, as a consequence, the character and his context are deprived of depth and meaning.
But how about a more contemporary comparison? This is from Hilary Mantel's Wolf Hall:
He steps into his barge for the first time, and on the river, Rafe tells his news. The rocking of the boat beneath them is imperceptible. The flags are limp; it is a still morning, misty and dappled, and where the light touches flesh or linen or fresh leaves, there is a sheen like the sheen on an eggshell: the whole world luminous, its angles softened, its scent watery and green. He stares down into the water, now brown, now clear as the light catches it, but always moving; the fish in its depths, the weeds, the drowned men with bony hands swimming. On the mud and shingle there are cast up belt buckles, fragments of glass, small warped coins with the kings' faces washed away. Once when he was a boy he found a horseshoe. A horse in the river? It seemed to him a very lucky find. But his father said, if horseshoes were lucky, boy, I would be the King of Cockaigne.
Pointing out the differences seems superfluous (the river is treated brilliantly throughout her novel).
Ordinary Thunderstorms isn't a bad book; it's readable and diverting. But one gets the sense of an opportunity missed. As the doorman of a riverside tavern remarks in Our Mutual Friend, "There's ever so many people in the river." But you will look in vain for them in Ordinary Thunderstorms: the river remains firmly confined by its own pages. When Boyd begins, 'Let us start with the river...,' he's stepping into a tradition in which he barely even dabbles.
Boyd's book?
ReplyDeleteI saw it as a film 'script' something that BBC Films would do well
Gents, just found your blog and it's looking meaty. I'll be back with considered comments once I'm sorted.
ReplyDeleteI thought Ordinary Thunderstorms was a v bad novel, but I think the reason that description lacks the power of the others is partly also that it is being told from Adam's point of view - 'the tide was high and still coming in, he saw...' - whereas the others are from an omnipotent narrator's point of view (you might argue that Mantel's is from Cromwell's point of view but I see it as from the omnipotent telepathic narrator of Cromwell's life's point of view.) Adam cannot be given such magnificent language, because otherwise he becomes a poet rather than a bit of a burke (is that how you spell berk [or is this?]in the meaning of idiotic drip?)
ReplyDelete2202: That probably would be a suitable use for it. He's written a few screenplays and this does seem to progress from scene to scene.
ReplyDeleteBoyo: Your bobble hat is a welcome sight.
z: I'm not sure Adam is narrating it. We're seeing this part of the book from his point of view but that's a different thing. It is possible to describe how someone perceives the world in language that isn't there own. I suspect Adam wouldn't readily use this language: the quiet force of the surging, tidal river beneath his feet, that special luminescence that a body of water throws off. But if he can say this why can't he say something a bit more interesting? Perception and a sufficient vocabulary don't appear to be problems.
BTW z, why did you think it was v bad?
ReplyDeleteBoyd is on my must-read list, I have heard good things
ReplyDeleteOne of the great advantages of the Kindle is that you can download the works of Jerome K. Jerome for $5.00. Here's a description of the Thames from the beginning of their trip:
ReplyDeleteIT was a glorious morning, late spring or early summer, as you care to take it, when the dainty sheen of grass and leaf is blushing to a deeper green; and the year seems like a fair young maid, trembling with strange, wakening pulses on the brink of womanhood.
The quaint back streets of Kingston, where they came down to the water's edge, looked quite picturesque in the flashing sunlight, the glinting river with its drifting barges, the wooded towpath, the trim-kept villas on the other side, Harris, in a red and orange blazer, grunting away at the sculls, the distant glimpses of the grey old palace of the Tudors, all made a sunny picture, so bright but calm, so full of life, and yet so peaceful, that, early in the day though it was, I felt myself being dreamily lulled off into a musing fit.
Worm: I'd be a bit selective. In my opinion, Brazzaville Beach, The New Confessions, Armadillo, Restless are good 'uns.
ReplyDeleteThanks for that David. I like the idea of being dreamily lulled off into a musing fit. And that seems an extraordinary deal. That sort of offer plus the launch of the new version and the store this week might give it the lift it needs to become commonplace over here.
Probably mainly because I thought the whore with a heart of gold element was an utter chiz
ReplyDeleteYes! Chiz indeed. I finished it, which I don't always do with novels, an indication it had some readability.
ReplyDeleteI should have mentioned that the Jerome quote is from his great book, Three Men In A Boat. Three Men, on the off-chance that anyone here hasn't read it, is incredibly funny, well-written and 130 years old. If you think that fourth-wall breaking, random nonsense and non-linear story telling is post-modern, think again. Jerome is probably the second-funniest comic author in English (after Wodehouse, who's works are also available for little or nothing on Kindle), Twain being, I think, in a different category.
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